Sentence Structure for Writers (2017)

The entire article's advice strikes me as biased towards one type of reader at the expense of all others.

Can you elaborate for plebes like myself?

I mean, I can try to elaborate. I don't see why you referenced plebes. I wasn't trying to be elitist

The advice assumes that people process information the same way that the author does. I'm sure a great many people do. But I'm also sure other people do not. After all, specialized and scientific writing did not evolve into a difficult to understand sentence structure for no reason.

Consider the last point. The author thinks that the description of the person dying/playing for Real Madrid is too long because he spends the entire time waiting for a verb. That's subjective. I would not have minded more information about the person before finding out that whatever happened happened.

Oh! Sorry, I did not meant to give you the impression that I was calling you elitist. It was more a friendly jab at myself that I did not quit understand what you meant, but was curious.

Your explanation makes sense. I guess I can say with certainty that I often forget others don't process information the same way I do, so when I read the article, I found myself mostly agreeing with it. Other perspectives welcome, of course.

Interesting to note that this is a bit about how we communicate with each other and my previous comment gave you an impression I did not intent. For a long time, I had a running hypothesis that humans, generally speaking, are awful at communicating because they either focus on the wrong details or couch their information in too much noise. As it turns out, I have severe anxiety, which very much colors the way I interpret messaging as well as how I send it out, usually vacillating between being too blunt and too verbose with a sprinkle of too many asides. The differences in how we communicate is something I'd love to learn more about